User talk:Ravi.mridhula

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Good job on the article! It's very well written, and your command over the language makes it a very easy and interesting read. I really like your topic as well - it is very interesting to read about the great ancient schools of India. I appreciate how your sentences are grammatically correct, which I know is a pretty hard thing to do with Sanskrit being your second language. I also really like your inclusion of the shloka in the middle, and I like how you have made a reference to the Arthashastra by Kautilya.

However, there are some ways through which you could have improved your article. I feel like you got off to a great start, but then you have abruptly ended your article, leaving it hanging in the middle. Your introduction to the topic is great, but there are some specific schools that you could have written about, like the Nalanda University and Takshashila University. There is a lot of information out there about the topic that you have selected, and I'm sure the English Wikipedia page is available too, which would have enabled you to elaborate more on your topic.

Also, you could have added a couple of pictures of the schools, with some captions. You also could have added some Inter-wiki links throughout your article, so that everyone who reads your article can view other information already present on Wikipedia, and form a well rounded picture of your topic in their minds. I found a couple of spelling mistakes, but other than that, I feel like you have made a really good effort. Also, you should have added the references from where you got your information. I think you should explore your scope for including more detailed information, and if you do that, I think you would end up with a great article. Lastly, great job, and keep it up!

- Neesha Thunga K